Tuesday, February 12, 2013
Blog Entry #7
The essay that I read for critique was by Scott
Cooper. In this essay, I do agree with what he is arguing for. Scott argues
that Obama’s speech is on point with the connecting ethos, pathos and logos in
order to make an even more convincing speech. One of the main things that Scott
could work on in his writing, however, is he use of quotes. He uses his quotes
as chunks of his paragraph instead of successfully weaving in his quotes to
make the paragraph flow. However, I like
the fact that Scott tells the reader exactly what the speech is about, instead
of inferring that the reader has already read Barack Obama’s speech.
Furthermore, I believe that Scott does appeal to his audience emotionally by
bringing Obama’s childhood into his argument and how Barack Obama found his
faith. In the original speech, Barack
Obama is speaking to a religious crowd about the connection of faith and
politics. In addition, on a scale from
one to ten I would rate Scott Cooper’s use of ethos at a seven. I does explain
to the reader what exactly the rhetorical use of ethos is, and he gives
examples of Barack Obama’s use of ethos, however, the quote that Scott uses for
his example takes up the majority of his paragraph. Also, I believe that Scott
could use more commentary after his examples to also help the paragraph flow
better. Scott Cooper’s essay is a good role model for this assignment because
it has a clearly stated thesis, and his paragraphs back up what he is trying to
prove. Although I do believe that Scott could fix up a few things on his paper,
the overall essay is good quality. As
the essay stands, I think that Scott included a great amount of research in
attempts of perfecting his essay. In the introduction paragraph, Scott mentions
the Constitution and the Bill of Rights in order to introduce the first amendment,
which is freedom of speech and religion. Scott also incorporates Barack Obama’s
original speech to a religious crowd, although he does not state where the speech
was originally held. In addition, other
than using the speech as a direct source, I believe that Scott could have gone
outside of the speech and researched other factors of the connection of faith
and politics. Since Barack Obama’s speech is the only credible source, it makes
the reader feel as if it is only Barack Obama’s view on the subject that is
being accounted for. Finally, in Scott’s
conclusion he simply restates the meaning of logos, ethos, and pathos, without
giving any further insight about the speech. Even though Scott Cooper has flaws
in his rough draft of the critique, I believe that he successfully makes his
point throughout the paper.
Friday, February 1, 2013
Entry #6
As I said
in entry number five, I personally believe that extreme on hands jobs are not
going to be completely taken over by technology. For instance even though some surgeries, such
as some specific eye surgeries, are being replaced by machines because their
might be better precision with the machines, someone is still needed to read
the outcome of the surgery or an exam to the patient. Not all jobs are capable
of being taken over by machines, therefor it in fact is survival of the
fittest. Furthermore, in order to ensure a job in the future economy, people
could major in studies such as CIS, computer information systems. This major
not only teaches you how to work with technology, it also helps you run it.
Furthermore, the government could limit the use of machinery. The reason that
so many people would be out of jobs is because the government is allowing
technology to run certain things instead of humans. In reality, a lot of technology is not
reliable, therefore it is humans who have to fix the problem. Limiting the amount of technology that is
available to use would help boost employment and eventually the economy.
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